Writing 101 Day Eight: Death to Adverbs

Today’s Prompt : Go to a local cafe, park or public place and write a piece inspired by something you see. Get detailed : leave no nuance behind.

Thoughtful writers create meaning by choosing precise words to create vivid pictures in the reader’s mind. As you strive to create strong imagery, show your reader’s what’s going on;avoid telling them.

Today’s Twist: Write an adverb free post.

My daughter dropped me off in  front of the mall, I walked in and looked around. I watched as a sales girl scooped tea leaves into a canister for a customer at the David’s Tea; I did not stop but continued walking.   I headed to the second floor to find a spot in the food court where I could sit and observe, but the place was full.

I went down to the lower level and found a small coffee shop where I could write my prompt.  Ahead of me in the line was a family: a father with baby in the pram and a bouncy toddler skipping her way in.   The little girl turned around and let her father know what she wanted.  Exhausted with the extra pressure of taking care of two little ones, he pointed to the seats and bid the toddler to sit down, while he got the food.

I watched with amusement as the frazzled man tended to his kids, then it was my turn to order.  The girl behind the counter looked at me and smiled, “What would you like?”

I answered at once  “A  small Cappuccino and a  cookie.”

She nodded and started to prepare my order, motioning me to the girl at the cash register.

I waited for my coffee as the father and his daughters walked out with their food.

Minutes later,  with my small cappuccino and cookie in hand, I spotted a corner in the shop to sit down. I dashed towards it, made myself comfortable, opened my book and scribbled some notes.

I took two sips of the cappuccino but found it too hot and tasteless. I did not want to drink it anymore, so I trashed it and left the coffee shop.

I remembered that I needed some hand towels, so I headed towards the Winners department store. I picked up three towels, paid the cashier, and since I had nothing else to do I left the mall.  I darted across the parking lot to the bus stop , arriving within seconds of my bus.  I waited for its passengers to get off and then hopped on and into the front seat.

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DP Daily Prompt: Mentor Me

Have you ever had a mentor? What was the greatest lesson you learned from him or her?

In the early years of my childhood, I did not have a mentor, I did whatever pleased me, i.e. ‘study less, play more.’

It displeased my older sister, that I was so carefree. I was told I’d be a failure, no education, no friends. It just did not bother me.

I studied enough to go up the ladder, it was what I wanted, work less and get more was my motto. To my surprise I wasn’t deprived of education as my sister predicted. My younger brother is the only one who said: “Ranu, you’ll do very well if you study a tiny bit more.”

I smiled and replied:  “what you want me to sacrifice my play time for studying?”

When I reached my  final  ladder, I put some thought into what I wanted  in life: I heard a soft whisper from my inner self, “become a teacher.”

It sounded terrific, then I thought it was worth giving up my playtime for doing well at that stage.

Although no one mentored me, my profs. gave me a nod every time I passed them by, meaning you are doing well, keep working.

I completed my education, ready with all the papers to apply for a teaching position. I was successful. I taught lower grades, I adored the kids I taught , they loved me. What more could I want, it was enough to carry on.

Right now I’m doing online courses and enjoying it. I work hard the laid back person has disappeared. I have two good friends who encourage me in my work, can I call them my mentors?

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365 Writing Prompts: The Satisfaction of a list

Who doesn’t have a list? So write one! Top five slices of pizza in your town,ten reasons why disco will never die, the three secrets to happiness—- go silly or go deep,just go list-y.

Three secrets to happiness: is health, good food, and lots of good friends of course.

Health is the most important thing for everyone. It makes you energetic, ready to conquer anything, keeps you contented, there is no fear of ill-health .

Good Food: is the key to good health, when you have food that agrees with your system, you have no fear of getting sick.

Good Friends: man is a social animal, he needs good friends, ones that gives him positive vibes, helps him to think of things that are beneficial to him to avoid depression.

In short when you are happy,you enjoy everything, the bright sun, the colorful flowers, the tasty fruits, the green, yellow, pink vegetables.

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