Writing 101, Day Nine: Point of View

Today’s prompt: A man and a woman walk through the park together holding hands. They pass an old woman sitting on a bench . The old woman is knitting a small, red sweater. The man begins to cry. Write this scene.

Today’s Twist: Write the scene from three different points of view. From the perspective of the man, then the woman, and finally the old woman.

The Man’s Point of View:

Eve and Mel decided to go for a walk. Eve suggested the  park close by, Mel agreed , they went through the park  and turned right  to watch little kids playing. While walking Mel thought how lucky he was to be married to Eve,  she is so soft- hearted , no one would believe she goes out of her way to feed the squirrels, these pests have ruined my garden he thought. Suddenly Eve asked him what he was thinking, nothing was his reply. They had walked quite a distance when they decided to go back, as they turned, Mel saw something  red  from the corner of his eyes. He made up his mind to check it out, when they  went closer he noticed an old woman knitting a red  sweater and humming a tune, the whole scene saddened Mel as he remembered his Grandma, tears filled his eyes and rolled down his cheeks. Eve held Mel’s hand, they got up  and left  the park.

Woman’s point of view:

Eve loved visiting the park on sunny days. This was a perfect day to do it. She convinced Mel . They were on their way through the park. Eve was doing all the talking Mel was listening.Eve was discussing   life with  grand children, she could play with them, buy them gorgeous outfits, the house would be  full of life.They had walked quite a  distance when Eve suggested they find a bench to relax. Luck was in their favor, not too far away they spotted a few benches. Eve breathed a sigh of relief and walked towards the nearest one. They sat down, Eve noticed Mel was looking at something,she focused her attention to the object Mel was watching, oh no she thought, it’s an old woman knitting something red. She wanted to say something but found him stiff and water from his eyes coming down his cheeks. Eve knew Mel was sad the old woman looked just like his Grandma.

The Old Woman’s Point of View:

Sitting on the park bench was Agnes. Aggie once was a happy go lucky woman,years of living alone wiped off her sweet nature. She was thinking about the small sweater she was knitting for her Grand kid.  Spending so much care knitting it  she  couldn’t be sure if  the kid’s mother would appreciate her hard work, doesn’t matter she told herself she loves knitting stuff for the grand kids, if they are happy, she doesn’t mind a bit of work. She observed a couple coming towards her, she was curious to find out. The man’s tear-filled eyes astonished her, she didn’t want to pry but showed the small sweater she just finished knitting!

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8 thoughts on “Writing 101, Day Nine: Point of View

  1. Dear Ranu,

    Thank you for this very creatively written post. I like a lot how you viewed the story through the eyes of different characters. To be able to see life through the eyes of another is a valuable skill!

    All good wishes,

    robert

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