Writing 201: Poetry, Day Four: Imperfect, Limerick, Enjambment
Today , write a poem about the imperfect nature of someone or something.
Today’s form: Limerick
Device : Enjambment
Poetry: Imperfect
Brother, you claim, you’re the picture of perfection
but, you cannot live up to our expectation,
What good is your claim
when, you put us all into shame
Dear brother the picture of perfection!
Just the other day, he said, ‘yo, Ranu
your friend, named Banu
you say,is an amazing girl
I , watched her fall when she tried to twirl
Your amazing friend Banu!’
I kid you not dear brother
your skill, I’d rather
not, bring up
this, your attempt to balance the cup
broke , was a poor spectacle, my perfect brother!
………………………….. 🙂
Sabethville 
Hahhaa…I liked this.Brothers can be so annoying!!!
Not so perfect after all, brother?? I truly enjoyed it…! 😀
Thank you Sabah, we do tease each other in real life. 🙂
Dear Ranu,
Thank you for this poem. We very much admire your skill in rhyming and verse! I think it’s clear that you have innate talent for composing poetry :-).
All good wishes,
robert
dear Robert,
I know you like my post but who is we? 🙂
Dear Ranu,
We would include my wife and I. I routinely share things with her :).
All good wishes,
robert
Thank you to you and your wife Robert. 🙂
That’s brilliant, Ranu. Made me laugh 🙂
It’s funny how we make fun of our siblings
without fear.Thank you, yes it’s my brother. 🙂
Being a brother with a sister, I can especially enjoy this verse. Even now, well past childhood, we can give each other a hard time. Your writing has detail and energy. It would be something if your brother could write back, using the same form. Hmmm. Thank you!
Thank you, it really would be fun like old times! 🙂
I think the first one is really good.
Alexander
Thank you Alexander. 🙂
My dearest sister,
What a limerick! And I am happy that I was not the “brother” described in the poem, because I do not know of any friend of yours called Banu!
😀
Thanks for sharing.
My dearest brother,
I meant my brother in Vancouver. I have no friend named Banu, I used it to rhyme with Ranu 🙂